Hi Rose,
I think you did quite a good job
I feel that you would need to work on that lower note, it seemed quite awkwardly placed for you and just uncomfortable
The high note on "seemed" at the end, didn't seem to fit in for me just personally. I think it was just very airy and a lot less power then the rest of the notes.
Also are you jutting your jaw when you go for the higher notes? Just wondering because I have been told that isn't the best thing to do.
Regardless I think it was a very nice rendition, just a little bit airy is all and with a few hiccups, but whats singing without those hiccups :P