Hi Keith, great effort man! I listened to the whole thing, and if you're willing, here are a few friendly critique observations:
-- You shift into a falsetto mode somewhere around F#4, definitely by A4. Your falsetto tone is mostly accurate to the pitch, but the tone is not as pleasing to the ear as a full head voice would be. Continue working on your head voice register. I think that will improve the audience's reception. For example 0:55-1:02, kinda has a "Kermit the Frog" falsetto tone to it, if you know what I mean. On those higher notes, sing full voice, with more forte and volume, avoid the falsetto. Work on your bridging and connecting.
-- You're consistently a little late on the beat, but in some areas it's especially noticeable. For example 2:03-2:10, and similar syncopated phrases in the song. Work on your time accuracy - it's especially important with Progressive Metal and syncopated or odd time signatures.
I hope this doesn't offend you in any way, or come across as nit-picking. The name of the forum is "Review & Critique My Singing", so I'm just trying to kindly share some honest observations. All the best to ya! You have a good voice, keep going!!!