hobbit rock

Thanks for the reply Robert. Those are really helpful comments.
The breathy tone is definitely my default and while it has it's place, I agree that I should have transitioned into a more present, assertive tone midway through the song. I used to only have a breathy tone and it has always been a "safe" place to sing from. There's something stabilizing about that posture for me. I have, over time, managed to cultivate other tones with more closure and resonance but they are less familiar so I rarely reach for those levers.
As for the cues- I think you're right about the one at :51. I think the delivery was just late and that could be seen as an oversight. Having said that, I do have a tendency to let my phrasing sit a little bit behind the beat. It might be from years of listening to Zeppelin but it's definitely something I do a lot. Sometimes I think I should try to be more deliberate about my phrasing...kind of along the lines of Liam Gallagher or something. That would probably help contribute to an overall sense of assertiveness.
The main source of paranoia/self consciousness for me over the past few years has been pitch/intonation. I know there was a time when I couldn't hear when I was a little under/over a note. I think I do now, but I don't always trust my ear. There are a couple of spots in this tune that sound a little out to me. Nothing crazy but still......
I did play the melody on a piano along with the finished vocal and there were definitely some areas that rubbed a little. Sometimes I wonder if doing that sort of thing is too stiff of a measure. Since I've gotten into some ear training I've realized that a lot of my favorite music from the 60's, 70's, 80's and 90's have vocals with less than perfect intonation. Anyway....
Yes...it's an original. I appreciate the supportive comments.
 
 

I already know what I think of this performance....I'd like to hear what others think. Referring to the timeline of the track would be helpful (example- "the sustained note at 2:21 needs work.")
Thanks in advance.
 
 

Hi folks, this is a song that the last time I was not quite happy on how it was sounding, new version with some differences on the approach:
 
 
Thanks everyone that can take a listen
 
 

Something I threw together in the wee hours of the night.  I did a double track vocal to try and get the sound right and I think besides a few occasional out of syncs it works nicely.  Hopefully you guys like it.
http://picosong.com/E2RM/

RIP Lemmy...
https://app.box.com/s/zalbo07na1x54fkwlyr0s9pfdufdzdy1
 

Great song from the 40s that requires some different approaches than what I am used to, very fun, and just in time with Fallout 4  
 

Good tunes in both genres. That worked out nicely

Jazz-  
 
 
 
 
 
And my other country selection
 
 
 

I love this Country song!!!
 
 

So my bass should get fixed soon and I want to start recording one man band cover songs so I can get more experience with mixing before putting together my album. 
 
I threw this together today in a couple hours.  Pretty much everything was first take and I haven't drummed in maybe half a year.
 
Bass isn't in there yet, but if anyone has any advice, I'm curious. It's Lou Reed so how does the pitch sound?
 
Edit Weird: track wasn't here
 
https://soundcloud.com/killerku/lou-reed-crazy-feeling-cover-beginnings
 
Here's bonus Clash