my own song .please critise it .

[brandyskank]

hey guys . im writing songs for a few years now and have loads of lyrics ,but i´m very sceptical in terms of my voice .

please could you give some tips or just say STOP SINGING

thanks

this is a link to one song i wrote :

http://snd.sc/dQAwyL

cheers

[ronws]

At times, your voice reminded me of George Harrison. I think your voice could use a little more volume. Either sing closer to the mic, or put more "oomph' into it, or both. And, trust me, I know, because I have done the same thing, you're floating the notes. If you pick a tone to hit on, the melody will sound stronger. By the way, it's a good song with a good storyline and memorable imagery. You should continue producing this song and get it sold.

[brandyskank]

thank you ! =)

what do you mean with " floating the notes " .. how can i improve this ?

thanks for your help .:cool:

greets

[ronws]

Floating notes - you are starting the note below pitch and "floating" up to it. Nothing wrong with that and it was the technique of many a country and western singer. But some songs just seem to flow better if you hit the note dead on. It's mainly a stylistic thing, rather than a "technical" problem.

[fridrix]

Same thing as "scooping"? :/