How can I make my tone more pleasant (audio included)?

[GuitarLord]

Hey there,

I've been working on my breathing for a while, and after learning how to use diaphragm properly, I managed to make great with my range (comparing to what I had previously). But now I'm not sure if I'm now happy with how it sounds.

Can you listen to this and tell me if this sounds pleasant or not. If not, how can I make my tone better?

Beware it's pretty loud, my voice is pretty loud by default, and if I try to make it less loud it will usually go to my throat, so I guess it has to be loud for this kind of song, at least for me

http://www.box.net/shared/sxed1jpvbq

Thanks,

N.

[Matt]

Sounds pretty good to me. You kept the folds together well when you went up. Your english pronunciation could be better and that alone would make it sound more professional. I think youre taking too big breaths of air so that you have to let out a lot after each phrase with a bit of a gasp.

[VideoHere]

Hey there,

I've been working on my breathing for a while, and after learning how to use diaphragm properly, I managed to make great with my range (comparing to what I had previously). But now I'm not sure if I'm now happy with how it sounds.

Can you listen to this and tell me if this sounds pleasant or not. If not, how can I make my tone better?

Beware it's pretty loud, my voice is pretty loud by default, and if I try to make it less loud it will usually go to my throat, so I guess it has to be loud for this kind of song, at least for me

http://www.box.net/shared/sxed1jpvbq

Thanks,

N.

that passage is on the louder side, what i might suggest is to add a little more emotion (a little more cry) to the song.