Sweet child o' mine [demo]

[devaitis]

Is it sound good? What to correct? Vowels I suppose.

I don't like Axl's but the song is really cool.

30s

http://www.box.net/shared/d45fsusur0lf68xdmn2r

[gno]

Hey that sounds really good. Good meaty tone up high. The only thing is to open up some of the vowels like Sky - it sounds like Sk-oh-ie. Just open these vowels up and you're there.

[jonpall]

Cool sound and good singing but you really need to change some of the vowels. The word "smile" sounds like "smole", f.ex. So I suggest that you really, really listen to the original song and try to match the vowels as well as you can. Right now it sounds like you have a huge accent. Some people would actually dig that but I think they're in the minority.

So Geno's post confuses me a bit because I think that you're using TOO open vowels and need to CLOSE them I.e. if you change "smole" into "smile", you would be CLOSING the vowel, right? Cheers.

[gno]

jonpall - I'm going by how open or closed a vowel is as described in this web page:

http://www.singwise.com/cgi-bin/main.pl?section=articles&doc=VowelsFormantsAndModifications

It sounds like devaitis is singing [o] as in "bone" when he should be singing [a] as in "father"

Excepts on these vowels from the above website:

In an open back unrounded vowel, such as [a], the vowel height is open, which means that the tongue is positioned as far as possible from the roof of the mouth. The vowel backness is back, which means that the tongue is positioned as far back as possible in the mouth without creating a constriction that would be classified as a consonant. The vowel roundedness is unrounded, which means that the lips are not rounded.

[o] is a close-mid back rounded vowel, which means that it has a vowel height that is close-mid, which means that the tongue is positioned halfway between close vowel and a mid vowel. Its vowel backness is back, which means that the tongue is positioned as far back as possible in the mouth without creating a constriction that would be classified as a consonant. Its roundedness is endolabial, which means that the lips are rounded and protrude, with the inner surfaces exposed.

[jonpall]

Ok, gotcha. But I think we are suggesting the same thing to devaitis, so that's good :)

[gno]

Yes - we're saying the same thing.

[ronws]

I can't add to Geno or Jonpall's statements. But I do like your tone, Devaitis. You sound relaxed and confident.

[Validar]

I couldn't access the "Carrie" file, but I heard the GNR clip. Your tone is rich, full, and powerful. Once you get the vowels polished up, I believe you'll be able to deliver this to a lot of happy listeners who won't mind that it doesn't sound exactly like Axl.

[ronws]

The best thing is to NOT sound like Axl. Do like Sheryl Crow or Fergie and sing it in your own voice, which you did Deva.