ThePowerOfOne

    I would like a third opinion on this. I can definitely be wrong and if I am it could explain some of my own problems but I do believe the first attempt of mrno1324 is the proper pitch only using a lighter phonation. The second attempt is an octave lower.

    Any else want to chime in?  Please if I am mistaken explain why so myself and mrno1324 can understand the difference.

It's entirely possible I'm off on this MDEW, maybe I'm hearing the OP's ultra light phonation as higher than it is? Won't be the first time.

I think your first line is indeed an octave higher than Mick's original whereas the second one is on pitch but you're not approaching it with the proper configuration so it takes you more effort.