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I did another take. The tuning is slightly different. And i completely butchered the held note at the end . It sounded too flat. Let me know what's wrong with this one please!
(Also edited first post to have the link)

EDIT: Once again blunt criticism so I can work on getting better! Thanks!

Well some parts I would say to practice in terms of pronunciation, of the ones that stuck out, would be the TH sound and the P at the end of slip (the punch sound of it). I'm currently teaching English in asia and they have similar problems with words like that, as well of Fs. I'm sure it'll be hard to improve pronunciation, but I'm sure you can manage! Not trying to seem harsh, just trying to help you out ! Good luck! Also, one of my favorite bands (before he made twin forks).

Just curious. Is English your first language? Sounds like a little bit of an accent in your pronunciation is throwing off how it sounds as well.

Sounds a little squeezed at the chorus parts. Timing's a little off too at some parts I think.

I like the second one a lot more. The first one, as said before, sounded a bit squeezed. Second one took some of that out. Did you change how you recorded it? Sounds different too.

I think it sounds good !

Yeah, I wasn't able to get that firm push on the notes today for some reason... Felt like the notes were too low pitched or something like that... I'll definitely give it another go and try to focus on better breathing to support the notes though! When I do I'll be sure to edit the first post so people know.

Thanks for the feedback!

Hey, so I'm just trying to work on singing to go with my guitar playing. Maybe it's just that whole phenomenon where most people don't like their own voice, but I'm not digging my singing that much. So I thought I'd post it up here to see what others thought/for advice. Guitar's in drop half tuning. The more brutally honest the better Because I plan to work exceptionally hard to improve and mean comments only give me more motivation and makes me more dedicated!

  
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Thanks!

PS. I hope to continue using these forums! Been reading them for a while now.