HCJ1967

Hi Joe, I listened to your "Silent Lucidity".
I rather appreciate your original interpretation. I would not want to discourage that, however...
1). If you are going to "make it your own", you have to still remain within the boundaries of pitch and rhythm. Cutting to the chase here, your recording has too many missed rhythmic cues and intonation issues. You need to tighten this up Joe, just flat out being honest with you.
2). Interpretation should be a delicate balance. It is possible to go to far. I am not suggesting that you did go too far on this, but you pushed the envelope. Something you have to appreciate is not only do you have to do the song a TRIBUTE, but hard core Queensryche fans will tar and feather you for even trying to sing out of the box what so ever, so if you dare to try, it had better be subtle and spot on Joe. QR fans are going to chew you to pieces with this on YouTube.
3). Your Silent Lucidity track is not the best of tracks... I have a bed track of this that is a lot better... click on the bed tracks link on the home page and purchase it there to try this again with a better bed track.
Try it again Joe and don't color out side of the lines so much... watch your cues and for sure... pay attention to the notes, its pitchy.
I know you are working with the new "The Four Pillars of Singing" system and I know this song like the back of my hand Joe... I have sang it a thousand times and have coached it a hundred times. Why don't you do a skype lesson with me. We can review the Pillars training method and content...and work on this song. I have the lyrics and the vowel modifications already marked out.
Coach

Joe, we look forward to your next attempt... just to be clear. My review did not say anything about sounding like Geoff Tate or singing it like Geoff Tate. I wouldn't want you to do that. People that sing covers and contentiously try to sound like the original artist, I think are missing a more fulfilling opportunity and challenge. Do justice, ... don't hack it up,... but try to make covers a little bit of your own as well. Otherwise, your just a well practiced, trained monkey. Fortunately, thats not your problem. 
I am talking about musicianship Joe... pitch and rhythm... tighten it up... it needs a lot of work on the fundamentals.