David

You have a great voice.. I'm not familiar with the material, but you sounded good doing them. I believe you need to use more of a diaphramic support method to build up more power, But besides that.. well done..

I listened to it again.. I really enjoyed your versions guys.. great job.

Hi Musician,

I wasn't paying attention really to the guitars.. However, I did notice what you said ;-)

In the first version, your natural tone had a ping to it. Although the most famous versions of this song have been sung by a baritone (high bari's), your natural tone shined through on #1.

The second version, which was still good, was more Covered / Muddy sounding to me (my opinion only of course).

Either one, you could sing in public confidently without worries...

** I don't think your voice is too soft for this type of song - IF you make it your own -- which in my opinion you did just that! You have to keep in mind -- like his music or not -- Brent Smith from Shinedown has a extremely powerful voice, and L.S voice has that characteristic tone to it ...

*** I really enjoyed listening to the combination of the two styles you did and was impressed on how well you managed to combine them smoothly.

If you want to build your power range, try holding back your breath when you are singing and really push down on the diaphram... Start soft and slow and eventually you'll be unstoppable..

I think it's more of a hybrid version Ron between Shinedown (verse influenced) and Lynyrd Skynyrd chorus..

I also agree that the first version is better, as the vocals seemed more powerful and stable (and the recording sounded better)..

I think you guys would do an outstanding job on a tune Hunger Strike by Temple of the Dog..

Would love to hear it, if you decide to give it a whirl.

i liked both versions - mixing and singing.. good job Ron and MDEW

Thank you Don.. I look forward to hearing you again.

yup

I don't say it to jug because of two reasons...

1. When Jug started posting vid after vid, we already knew point number 2.

2. Jug isn't looking for critique when he did that. .He was showcasing his material. we all know that.. Same with Felipe etc..

anyway.. not interested in the subject anymore.. :-) cutting into my play time ..

Hi Don,

you did pretty good.... I believe you need to brighten your sound a bit more.

This can be done by singing more into your head register -- without the chest weight..

Bringing your sound forward will allow you to hit the higher notes as well.

I'm not familiar with the song really, as I usually do rock music, but I did a sample of what I mean..

https://app.box.com/s/hfy3plf2rg6ibhiudo19

I am a baritone, but I brought the tone forward which gave it a brighter sound.. Please forgive me by the way, as I was reading the music / lyrics while performing it..

You just want a fight Bay... grow up. You don't make sense, so you either don't understand english-- I was giving you the benefit of the doubt...

Anyway, I'm done talking with you.. When you are willing to grow up and take critique to material you post in the critique and review forum, then come talk to me..

I don't have time to deal with children...

Don't feel bad Ron. Even if I posted my solo version, David and singingnewbie will have bad things to say about my singing so don't blame yourself.

Bay : Only thing I mentioned was that it was lacking emotion and it was more unison then harmony.. I never mentioned your singing was bad, infact I mentioned the exact opposite.. please read posts in full.. If english isn't your first language (which I'm starting to suspect), please ask what I mean, instead of assuming.. thanks Bay.

Ron : as mentioned above I only commented on the lack of emotion and the stylistic aspect of being in unison instead of harmony... some of the issues was recording issues, and not that of your actual performance -- sorta lacking a proper master to the track... You and Bay have proven you guys have the chops, but in comparison to previous material released by you and by Bay, this wasn't the best performance by either of ya.

That's it.. rock on.. keep it live.. and have fun...

Bay........

meh.... not worth it... You don't want to hear anything you don't want to hear.. so no point...

haha.

I didn't like it... although pitch was on, there was no emotion in the song - only going through the motions...

I agree it was more of a unison then a harmony

Singingnewbie, Yup, they were just showcasing the song. I agree they need a "showcase" area for those just looking for applause -- I have a few I'd post to that too.. I also agree that Bay doesn't like critique and gets offended easily over it... But meh..... He has a good voice and usually does good on his songs..

Great pointers for you listed above by the other posters. Work on those points, and you'll really excel...

Currently, you sounded nice -- pitch was good, tone was good, etc.. You definitely have something there, so don't be afraid to let it out..

Find songs that suit your voice, but also push you a bit (not overly) so you can grow your voice...

good job. you suite this style of song .. well done

You have a nice voice, but no dynamics in this song.. a little monotone.

Your speaking voice reminds me of Bill Clinton ... ;-)

I think you sound MUCH better singing lower - mid range stuff.. I really don't think your dental situation is the reason, it appears more to be a manipulation of your tongue / jaw, and over emphasis on vowel modifications that causes the pronunciation issues that were mentioned. You only need to alter words / vowels when you sing higher to increase the range / tone and prevent slamming the consonants. When singing lower, you can sing them as you speak them.

Remember to keep your mouth open, drop your tongue and make your tone brighter (especially when singing high -- I find you sound muffled / extremely covered on your high notes in other songs - but you have a great vocal range)..

There is no mistake that you definitely have a lot of range and can reach high in the note scales. Just some simple things to work on, that will make you even better Ron.

I think your tone is good, but you need to watch your dictation.. Hard to understand what you are saying when you roll words together..

Your tone is cool, but you need to break your words up more as mentioned above..

that's a good reason ;-)

I think over all , you did pretty good. You have a nice high timbre when singing...

Some parts pretty pitchy, but not overly.. started a bit wobbly, but 2nd verse and chorus, you let loose and it rocked.

you sound like a baritone.

you shouldn't sing songs that are out of your range.. then you just strain...

even if you like them...

TERRIBLE!!!

Joking.. well done .

I agree with the others.. And yes.. we all expect really bad comments when we first post... I'm not a good singer but I have confidence and, I have fun with it.... You have a great start here...

funny.. although the structure can be changed somewhat with the slight pauses here and there with more emphasis (I like when you change your pitch higher, and work through it that way -- brings out dynamics).. I'm starting to dig the tune -- the feel of the song - it's catchy...

I would repeat the chorus (The first part you go higher in tone) somewhere in the second verse, as it showcases the song i believe...

I still think you can improve on the points that were brought up before, but bravo on the song -- i see where you were / are going with it...