David

I didn't like the song. For me, your 'singing' wasn't singing.. there was no change in pitch, no dynamics, no change in volume, no feeling,etc. For me the song was a big soup, with no pauses, stops, interludes, segways, or flow. I can hear a cut and paste (when you stopped the recording (probably to catch your breathe) and then restarted it from where you left off.

I agree with the breathing. But .. this is more in the line of the Spoken Word and not really singing.. I didn't hear any singing in the song, just more rounded, bouncing spoken word.. Sorta like William Shatner (but your voice is better )..

agreed.. I liked it too... I did a cover of this song as well a bit back... My version is : https://soundcloud.com/shortdaveradio/rocket-man-cover?in=shortdaveradio/sets/cover-songs

Just messing around... www.soundcloud.com/shortdaveradio

I thought you did a great job on it...

@Adolph... she has wings man.... wings...

very nice. remember to support from the stomach and not the throat ;-).. enjoyed it... (enjoyed lego house too... some timing issues, but not bad).

If it was a few years back ;-)... I'm married with three kids, so I'm off the market.. but hey... Adolph is available .... Again.. great job Amir.

i wouldn't change it .. the song wouldn't fit a "happy" overtone to it...currently, it explores the inner depths of the listener (allows us to reach inside for past experiences, etc).. if you put a 'happy' transition to it, you will (in my opinion) ruin the song and the effect .. The song is really good The video is interesting The girl is hot You have a bitching beard ;-) Great job.

You're not that good right now bro.. Hold back more air, increase your volume, open your mouth more, sing from the diaphragm, and project your voice as if you are singing to someone across the room without a Mic.. Sing with gusto.. Remember to pay attention to mono-toned tendencies and sharp abrasive endings to words, which makes you sound like you are just talking with a bit of vibrato at the end of the sentence.. CAN YOU LEARN TO SING? Absolutely... get a coach, learn the basics (breathing, projection, posture, expression), and you'll rock it...

I agree with the top posts.. I enjoyed it ... thanks for sharing..

email sent..

You are very welcome.. I know it's hard to hear negative comments from others, especially when it comes to a passion that one has... But I feel it is necessary.. Of course, I am NOT trying to sound like an ASS , but trying to erase all aspects of fantasy from a post, by relaying what " I " hear and feel about a performance.. THIS is only my opinion of course.. Do you have potential? I believe you do.. You have a nice quality to your vocal tone, but it is merely the "support" and slamming of the constants that is limiting your performance thus far.. IF you work on that, and really get a great grasp on the breath and supporting from the diaphragm, I think you will rock it out -- Your pitch will be online, the dramatic nuances will be intact (because it won't be interfered with breath (lack of), though out, etc.. etc.... I am NOT trying to discourage you bud... I too started off Pitchy (WAY MORE then you), when I first started

It sounds completely pitchy from start to finish. Hold the support more and constantly push down on the diaphragm. I don't know how you sounded before but this isn't good at all -- not yet. If you have improved then you will reach your goal. Again practice, build and apply a lot more support. It will help with pitch a lot.

Support support support more.... tone wasn't bad.. but your breathing and support really lacked... I felt like passing you a paper bag to breathe into before you passed out... Seriously though, not too bad and you were on key.. Work on the support and breath control... I would recommend some open throat techniques for you, as you seem pretty shut down.. So basically : Keep you tongue down Open your mouth wider Breath from the stomach / diaphram and not the chest take a breathe before every phrase etc.

I thought you sounded flat often through the skyscraper lower register parts.. but sounded nice for the hook.. But not bad at all. Cannonball - a little too much mask.. but again, not bad. You seem to give zero support when you are in your lower register but kick it in when you raise the key.. Try to keep the support going at all times...

Your pitch, tone, emotion, dictation, delivery, key, tempo, support, intonation and timbre were extremely off. Unfortunately you will need a lot of training with a professional vocal coach, but if it's something you love to do, and you are willing to put in the long , hard work to get there - you will achieve a pleasant singing voice.. Right now however - you have a long way to go. :(

Meh.. you did alright man. Like the others.. work on the support factor and you'll do just fine...

Haha... Humm... now you are confusing me... Daniel didn't provide any helpful information, but just made an open ended comment which I inquired what it was about... He may be a professional singer, but that doesn't mean anything, as anyone can be a professional singer if they like, even if you sound like peewee herman.. It's just a title given to someone that sings for a living - good or bad... I've heard him sing, and read his previous comments in other threads, and he is talented and knowledgeable - but I'm only referring to this thread...

confused about your statement here Daniel... who and in what way are your referring? This is a review and critique my singing section and her performance although very well done, was far from perfect.

Breath and support will allow everything into place and release tension from building, where we normal have the tendency to choke off the chord - thus strain for the notes. Keep your shoulders relaxed and back, breath from the stomach and not the chest (when you take a deep breath your shoulders shouldn't move), take a breath after each phrase and gently push down on your diaphragmatic muscles at all time to keep them engaged -- of course the higher you go for a note, the more you need to push down on it and keep your rib cage expanded (lungs 3/4 full).. this will help with the tension. Even the issues mentioned above, they were slight and not really of much concern -- but you did want critique... solid performance all around.

I think you sounded best (a few pullup issues to reach a note), but with Lonesome when you go. Country vibe is your thing (out of the three listed), but you could do any of them.

Pisses me off when people remove their clip.. leave the damn thing on.. haha..

Hi Aggie.. I had a bunch of critiques for your performance here.. but think it would be premature to critize some parts, as I think you have the skill.. However, I think you should record it to the backing track... Some parts you were pitchy, off key... and flat... BUT that could be several different factors.. Near the end.. in your high register, you totally lost it.. Crashed... haha.. sorry.. but you did (we ALL HAVE) at times.. I think you knew it too, because you stopped the energy level after it.. haha.

Humm... when you get to the part of " When she cuts your hair, etc..".. you get too nasally... try cutting back the mask, and raising your chest voice more to tackle it... it will add more color / flavor to the sound.. Too much over emphasis on the cry factor (maybe their's a god above..e tc..).. Then you got too nasally / mask for the next part... Your high notes (halleUUUU) is spot on... well done\ there..