Can someone critique my singing on this rendition of Cat Steven's song

[Chapman123]

Here's the link https://soundcloud.com/aaron-chap/where-do-the-children-play-cover ....sorry for the really bad audio quality though

[MDEW]

I am all for changing a song to make it your own and I applaud your efforts. It sounded like your were trying to channel Leon Redbone in this. I love Redbone as much as I love Cat Stevens but it just did not fit for this song.

I could not understand any of the words and the grit along with the slurred words do not work together.

Your voice itself does not sound bad. I think you could sing a much better interpretation of this song.

[Chapman123]

Thanks for your honesty , I agree completely now that I look at it from another perspective.

[MDEW]

Did you have to look up Leon Redbone to understand my post?

When I listened to your song there were two other songs by Gabriel Kelley. Were you singing on either of those? Without the grit you sound similer to the guy singing.

I have been given the advice to keep to comments on tone and pitch in the review section but I also have problems with tone and style and when something does not CLICK I would rather have someone tell me about it.

Singing is as much about delivery as it is with tone and pitch.