TMV World Legacy Member singerguy1 Posted November 27, 2014 TMV World Legacy Member Share Posted November 27, 2014 Hey forum users - I really want to post a video to my facebook page of me doing this song. I'm looking to be a full time gigging musician so I'd like all the critique you can give me! I'm currently trying to get some songs recorded so I have SOMETHING to show bars/venues and to post on my facebook music page. I'm having trouble with the word "Fly" (me to the moon) right at the beginning. It's not too high, it's a middle C - but it always seems to be pitchy. I've practiced trying to keep it on pitch, and I can't seem to get it tight. I know there's a couple of other spots that are a little bit messy as well. I'd appreciate any and all feedback! Thanks! The video might be shaky, I'm not really sure why - but it's kind of funny http://youtu.be/OK5HtK5yNmM Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TMV World Legacy Member EnKay Posted November 27, 2014 TMV World Legacy Member Share Posted November 27, 2014 A wonderful rendition of a wonderful song. I like the tone of your voice, very fitting for traditional pop, I would say. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TMV World Legacy Member ronws Posted November 27, 2014 TMV World Legacy Member Share Posted November 27, 2014 Good effort. I could not hear the starting pitch error you were talking about and all I could suggest is start out with fl-ah m - eh instead of fly me. Sing the vowels, don't speak them. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TMV World Legacy Member Clint Torres Posted November 27, 2014 TMV World Legacy Member Share Posted November 27, 2014 Actually I didn't think the opening word (fly) was bad. It was strong and sounded fine. But at 13 seconds the word "mars" was dead. No support and you lost it. Throughout the song, anything that might be considered off would be for the same reason. The note got weak (no support) and due to the low pitch you lose it. I'm guessing English is a second language? Some annunciation problems although minor. But that still effects the note. Not bad though...minor details. :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TMV World Legacy Member Bono Posted November 27, 2014 TMV World Legacy Member Share Posted November 27, 2014 I like it! I think you have a nice voice and this song fits you very well... I think the word Fly is very on pitch as the rest of the song, i don´t see any problem with it... I also believe that with a little of technique you can perfectly go up in the part "please be true" and higher Please, review and critique my latest post: Donny Hathaway - A song for yousouncloud: https://soundcloud.com/matias-azar-1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TMV World Legacy Member singerguy1 Posted November 28, 2014 Author TMV World Legacy Member Share Posted November 28, 2014 Well I haven't gotten many (helpful) voice lessons in my singing career, so I'm primarily self-taught, with the occasional youtube video and lots of reading about how the voice works and functions. But English is my native tongue. That "mars" is definitely not a low note for me, I have about another major 6th below that before I'm at the bottom of my range(). I was definitely slacking on my breath support though and kind of rushed it - there's a lot of chords to remember I had been at it for a few hours and was pretty determined to get a recording done the day, but I still wasn't happy with it so I put it on here instead. But I definitely agree, I could have used more support. Thanks for the feedback everyone, I'll be sure to post the final video! :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TMV World Legacy Member singerguy1 Posted November 28, 2014 Author TMV World Legacy Member Share Posted November 28, 2014 And happy Thanksgiving everyone (in America)! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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