This is my first attempt to rap what do you think?

[freakyale]

Hi guys I don't usually rap but I sing and this is my real first attempt to rap what do u think? and can u hear my italian accent? is it annoying?

 

thanks for your answers and here is the video https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8_vYEA22Ruk

[Gsoul82]

Hey Ale,

Please go ahead and upload a picture to your profile. It helps the forum a lot. If you don't know how to do it, please watch this video:

 

 

 

I'll let you know what I think after you upload a picture. Thanks, Ale.

[freakyale]

Done :-D

[Elvis]

In Rap music >>>DICTION<<< is the most important. And thats where you lack. You actually have a nice tone for it, its preety easy to listen to you. Just pronunciation need to be better. And i dont hear an Itallian accent at all, but i do hear someone "struggling" to say the word correctly.

 

Otherwise dude that was preety good. Just watch out on a rhythm a bit. 

6/10

[freakyale]

In Rap music >>>DICTION<<< is the most important. And thats where you lack. You actually have a nice tone for it, its preety easy to listen to you. Just pronunciation need to be better. And i dont hear an Itallian accent at all, but i do hear someone "struggling" to say the word correctly.

 

Otherwise dude that was preety good. Just watch out on a rhythm a bit. 

6/10

​thanks :-)  thanks for your advice and I am happy my italian accent doesn't come out , cuase I have a lot of relatives in the usa and I have been speaking en since I was a child but espcially when I am singing sometimes people tell me they can  hear my accent to much :-)

[Elvis]

I live in Croatia (Istria) and im like 1h drive from Italy. Also Italian is like a second language here in Istria so i know how it sounds and i can even speak it abit. And i dont really hear italian accent, just bad pronunciation. Not bad just a bit clunky.

[KillerKu]

There is some neat push/pull in some of the slower verses. In the faster sections you're falling behind the beat. I feel like it would have more energy if you pushed the beat.

 

My biggest suggest is that you are mono - volume. In order to get a stronger rhythmic flow you should emphasis various syllables with more or less volume. Part of it is, Fergie isn't really a reknowned rapper, she's known more a singer. You might want to listen to more advanced rappers. 

 

With rhythm in general, I like to think of it as a way of creating motion and providing tension and relief. If you're late on a beat it can drag, if you're early it can rush. If you delay someone's expectations and resolve it, it can be satisfying. If you emphasize a louder note it can surprise, playing something softer it can lull or add texture to a stronger rhythmic structure. Think of syllables as percussive elements that can be at various volumes to create motions and moods.

 

Obviously rap still has pitch variation as well. You're already speaking somewhat melodically, without sustaining enough pitch to be seen as singing, so that is good. But think of your movement up and down on each word, conversationally how it expresses the subject matter.

 

Overall, you're on your way, just keep training and working on the skills.

[GrungeManiac]

My biggest suggest is that you are mono - volume.

​This.