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  • TMV World Legacy Member
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You sound really good on the chorus and the higher notes when you are going for it. Nice tone and nice expression. The thing is that both verses are suffering pitch problems and rhythm problems. The very first couple of lines in the song are extremely important to get right, otherwise you can put off the listener. There are just a few - but important spots - where you are going sharp in pitch, and getting ahead of yourself in rhythm (rushing) - in both verses. If you work to eliminate those issues, the performance should come together nicely.

  • TMV World Legacy Member
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That was really good. :) I enjoyed that.

"You need a strong foundation to reach the heights."

  • TMV World Legacy Member
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Thanks guys! Geno, do you mean the words "mind" and "door" in the first verse for example? Where the note changes half-way through?

Edit: I just listened to the original again and as a result, noticed the "rushing" of the words in my version! Cannot unhear :lol:.

  • 3 months later...
  • TMV World Legacy Member
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Nice version , here it's mine, i did not have a good mic,

it's a little old recording.

http://www.goear.com/listen/a936710/hello-lionel-y-yo-

Critic!!

bye friends!

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  • Administrator
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Painless,

Would like to hear you on Soundcloud, but one again, it's glitching, and all I get is that "Oh. No" message :mad:

Regards,

Adolph

Adolph C. Namlik
Administrator ~ The Modern Vocalist World
Western N.Y.

Email : chief188@hughes.net
716~257~9606
"My Life's A Stage"

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