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I really enjoyed it and it is the right song for your voice. What I noticed is that background vocals are off in the chorus on the phrase "don't want to hurt no one." The lead vocal is on the right path, the BV strays a smidge. I have a feeling that you actually tracked BV separately, rather than dupe and change mix. Thing I learned, make the consonants soft to non-existant on BV so they do not compete with the lead line.
Great mix and recording. Definitely keep this in your set list. If you ever show up at my house for brisket, you will have to sing this song. And I will sing the BV.
Awesome song that feels like I have lived it.
Now for useless trivia. Steve Miller is from the Dallas, Texas area. He is a stickler for sound quality and so he does not play live venues very much.
Nearly every interview, someone has asked him "what is 'the pompatus of live'?" His reply is, "I have no idea. It was a phrase that fit the beat for that part of the song and I could not think of a lyric that meant anything."

I also like your version. And, I think, between you and Felipe, you have more of the compressed sound that Bruce has. Your articulation is spot on and with no accent. Brilliant.
I noticed that you have an MXL in the stand, just like the one I have. How are you liking it?

I'll ease off now. I will say this, though, if you spend the effort to state why something cannot be done, it will be a self-fulfilling prophecy.

Yeah, send me your address so I can fed-ex you a box of tissues for your tears. Finish the song, anyway. You already have more than the Beatles had when they started out.
Take advice from David Lee Roth from the song "Crazy from the Heat."
"I ain't complaining, you do the best with what you've got. I know you're laughing 'cause it's easy to tell
I'm going crazy ...."
 

Yeah, look, I know, you are proud of how old and stubborn you are. And I am older, with more practice being stubborn. Finish the production, secure copyright, get it released.
Then, get ahold of JJ Abrams and / or who ever his music person is and get it synchro-licensed to the next Star Trek movie. This would be awesome in that sound track, with Chris Pine doing all kinds of daring-do.
But I know you want rear back and prove how stubborn you are and dismiss my advice. Well, come at me bro ...

Yeah, look, I know, you are proud of how old and stubborn you are. And I am older, with more practice being stubborn. Finish the production, secure copyright, get it released.
Then, get ahold of JJ Abrams and / or who ever his music person is and get it synchro-licensed to the next Star Trek movie. This would be awesome in that sound track, with Chris Pine doing all kinds of daring-do.
But I know you want rear back and prove how stubborn you are and dismiss my advice. Well, come at me bro ...

Just stay with the whiny brat all the way through. Although, I think for humor's sake, you could ape Rick Allen, the drummer and his intro on another DL hit. It is him with the fake german accent saying "unter glieben glauben globen." And by the way, that phrase doesn't mean anything, it was his way of counting in the beat of the song.

I have enjoyed everything by FF and "Monkey Wrench" is probably my favorite. And I have followed Dave's career, including his touring as the drummer for Queens of the Stone Age, another awesome and underrated band. I saw a recent vid where Dave showed how they recorded their latest album direct through a mixing board to 2 inch tape. Talk about committment. You have to get it right the first time. And he had the instruments and mics set up literally in the garage. Old school, low tech, and totally rocking.

I really liked "Worn" specifically because of the time changes. That is way harder to nail than a 4 on the 4 boom-chuck at 160 bpm. Definitely an AIC vibe there with a voice that went from Weiland to Staley to something new and fresh.
"Understanding" is awesome and is a radio hit with very much a Foo Fighters feel, but with a clearer and more intelligible voice. I love Dave Grohl but his growl can get so thick.

Beg.
You sounded more strong and sure in the second and later repeats of chorus. I think the first one, you were trying to add meat and it was a bit shaky, like you were still looking for your line in the song. The later parts, I know you were going lighter but it worked better. And before you worry too much about how close you might achieve Joe's tonality, please remember that a really huge part of his sound, especially on this album, was the mixing and recording acumen of engineers like Robert "Mutt" Lange and Bob Rock and other engineers influenced by the lush sound they produced.  Lead vocals were often double and triple tracked the old fashioned way. Reverbs and chorus rack units. It made his voice sound bigger than it is. Wet and splashy drums, fuzzy bass, chorused guitar, even in a band that had two guitars.
Then some more on the BV from the other band members, like Phil and Steve, who could also sing.
This song is a test of a singer's mettle in going in and around the passagio because that is where the chorus is. It's almost as if the high "screams" are easier to do because they are just noises, rather than articulated lyrics. So, bravo for having the huevos to try this song.
I agree, this song suits your voice and vice versa. I think you will find it easier if you pick a mode for your voice and use it all the way through.

Hi guys, I haven't been on the forum in quite a while. I have been busy working and also super busy with my various bands and projects. This is from my band Tair. Normally in this group I play guitar and sing harmony and some lead vox not unlike Jerry Cantrell. We do mainly rock in the vein of Foo Fighters and Alice in Chains type material but this song I wrote just didn't really fit into our normal material so I just finished it on my own because I hate to leave ideas unfinished lol. Anyways, I have mainly recorded cover songs for review on the forum but I have never posted my original material so I thought I would see what you think?
 

Yeah it was a bit whack, I was disappointed that they couldn't get the vocals right in the backing xD.  Next time I'm just going to play the music on the acoustic myself and have you record the backing vocals for me!  

I really enjoyed it and it is the right song for your voice. What I noticed is that background vocals are off in the chorus on the phrase "don't want to hurt no one." The lead vocal is on the right path, the BV strays a smidge. I have a feeling that you actually tracked BV separately, rather than dupe and change mix. Thing I learned, make the consonants soft to non-existant on BV so they do not compete with the lead line.
Great mix and recording. Definitely keep this in your set list. If you ever show up at my house for brisket, you will have to sing this song. And I will sing the BV.
Awesome song that feels like I have lived it.
Now for useless trivia. Steve Miller is from the Dallas, Texas area. He is a stickler for sound quality and so he does not play live venues very much.
Nearly every interview, someone has asked him "what is 'the pompatus of live'?" His reply is, "I have no idea. It was a phrase that fit the beat for that part of the song and I could not think of a lyric that meant anything."

First off, you can can the condescending attitude of meeting our demands. We really are trying to help. And if you read the information given to you at both your signing into the forum and repeated in this thread, it does not say, use any old thing that eventually gets you to a streaming link. It says to post a link that streams. And if that is going to be a problem for you, then it will be a problem for anyone trying to help you. And for some of us, your link was simply not working, period, paragraph, end of book, forever, amen. Browbeating us about it won't actually win you any points of credibility, either. Chill, go with the flow.
This a slightly better recording. You are still coming in too hot on the mic, but at least it is only on the louder notes and not all the way through. And yes, I give myself permission to comment on that because I have been king of the crappy recordings. Ask anyone who has been around here for a while.
And you are still off pitch. I would suggest that you really listen to your recording, the one you shared here. I can't point to a particular point in the song because it is the entire song. So, just pick a spot or phrase in the song and really listen. The reason is I am wondering if you are not capable of making a note that matches pitch and if it is a hearing problem.

You said it sounded horrible. So, why should we want to listen to something horrible?
And yeah, the whole stubborn-and-not-paying-attention-to-what-we-say thing, that's not going to work for you as well as you might hope.

Simon,
I want to compliment you on choosing a kick ass song. Rob Halford is most certainly one of the greatest of all kind... 
 
Review:
- You need TA engagement, you are on the edges of your vocal folds.
- It has pitch problems, in large part because you are not stable with good TA strength.
 
How do you fix:
- The Four Pillars of Singing
- Train Onsets & Sirens: Resistance: #3 ... and then work on these parts very slowly inside a belty position... 
     - A&R Onsets + Slowly hold onto the musculature and train your articulators how to shape these lyrics on these notes.
 
Take note how narrowed Halford is on his articulation and vowels... A certain level of "ease" as he sings this... BIG CLUE... that is because he is amplifying the resonance, not hollering.
Singing like this is about focusing acoustic energy, like a laser beam... from narrowing.. which can't really happen correctly, if you don't have TA strength.
Train with me and Ill show you how... 
It is melting down because you don't have belt strength for it.
 

I agree with G. And the paid part of review my singing is known from the front, as well as the request and wish by the owner, creator of this forum to have some kind of avatar of color, with exactly every new member not doing it, making me think that needs to be more emboldened. 
We concentrate on singing, here, but in all the styles you could imagine. So, is the crack about that to imply that we are not a musical community or broad enough because we have reminded you of the cost? And before you reply again with "that's not what I said," be aware that we not only can re-read, we can also read between the lines.
Now, go ahead and call me salty.To quote Robert DeNiro, "are you talking to me?"

You need to re-read and absorb Robert's reply. If you think it is horrible, why should we bother listening to it? Are you waiting for "OMG, you are the best singer ever and quit criticizing yourself"?
That's going to be a long wait, so you might order a pizza.
Instead, work on the song, make it the best that you can. One of my pet peeves is when people want to give all these conditions and disclaimers up front. Forget all that. I don't want to read about that. I want to hear you singing as best as you can. And that is what Robert is asking for. 
Might you still have some things that need work? Maybe, and those comments will happen.
I have been guilty of recording songs I liked that don't really sound right in my voice, especially in the original arrangement. So, I have been where you are. Instead, I really examine my recordings and I have a few I have worked on that I have not shared because I know it's not sounding right. I might play with them some more. Maybe not. So, my work ethic is also improving and it also explains why I have not posted anything in a while. I am becoming more choosy and there may be few here thinking "Hallelujah, about stinking time." 
So, re-think what you are doing.

I agree with G. And the paid part of review my singing is known from the front, as well as the request and wish by the owner, creator of this forum to have some kind of avatar of color, with exactly every new member not doing it, making me think that needs to be more emboldened. 
We concentrate on singing, here, but in all the styles you could imagine. So, is the crack about that to imply that we are not a musical community or broad enough because we have reminded you of the cost? And before you reply again with "that's not what I said," be aware that we not only can re-read, we can also read between the lines.
Now, go ahead and call me salty.To quote Robert DeNiro, "are you talking to me?"

You need to re-read and absorb Robert's reply. If you think it is horrible, why should we bother listening to it? Are you waiting for "OMG, you are the best singer ever and quit criticizing yourself"?
That's going to be a long wait, so you might order a pizza.
Instead, work on the song, make it the best that you can. One of my pet peeves is when people want to give all these conditions and disclaimers up front. Forget all that. I don't want to read about that. I want to hear you singing as best as you can. And that is what Robert is asking for. 
Might you still have some things that need work? Maybe, and those comments will happen.
I have been guilty of recording songs I liked that don't really sound right in my voice, especially in the original arrangement. So, I have been where you are. Instead, I really examine my recordings and I have a few I have worked on that I have not shared because I know it's not sounding right. I might play with them some more. Maybe not. So, my work ethic is also improving and it also explains why I have not posted anything in a while. I am becoming more choosy and there may be few here thinking "Hallelujah, about stinking time." 
So, re-think what you are doing.

Then this thread would belong in the "review my singing" section.
 

Welcome, David. Just a side question. Does everyone in Yukon have crazy spiked white hair as good-looking as yours or is it just you? If so, who is your stylist because that guy or gal is a genius.
There are a number of singer training programs, chief among them being the 4 Pillars of Singing, available through this forum thanks to our benefactor and author of 4 Pillars, Robert Lunte, who also gives personal lessons in whatever fashion. In person at his studio in Seattle, WA, USA or via skype.
Certainly there are a number of us amateur (unpaid) singers but really, you should consult a professional voice teacher when given a chance.

Then this thread would belong in the "review my singing" section.
 

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Please provide a version of the song that you feel sounds great, or is your best effort, or has elements that you feel are good. If you feel it is "horrible" and you know it, then there is no need to take time listening and reviewing it.
Put your best foot forward always, especially in here when asking for reviews.
Tough Love Coach
 

Definitely stepping in the right direction. Now you are not crashing end notes on the siren, which I think is a great improvement. And nice to hear your progress applied to "Black Hole Sun." That song sounds good in your voice and you should keep it as both a song to have in your "set list" and as a benchmark to measure your progress. In the end, even as good as your sirens get, the song is the thing.