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Recording quality isn't as good as others I've done because the mic was too close to the guitar, but you can still hear my voice well enough. It's a very soft song. I'm quite proud of this song because I've, as far as I know, invented a new guitar tuning. EAD(or G)CFE

I tried to write a more unsettling song but I'm not sure if my voice and the guitar are blending well or if just sounds awkward, any input? BTW, these are just some of the songs I might include in a future demo album, I have some more which I won't upload to soundcloud but I'm seeking some opinions on these songs to determine whether or not I should have them on the cd. haha I did forget, sorry  

I think I'm going to try this structure(I agree with many areas of your perception) and we'll see how it goes . 
 
I'm traveling home to see my friends. (nostalgia and longing)
I don't think I'll return again. (feeling torn)
The wind and I have never been friends. (loneliness, mixed with frustration)
Its slithering sheets only pretends, (betrayal) 
I won't chase its tricks again. (regret)
To be something, it never plans. (independence)
So down to the frozen river I go. (resolute)
In search of secret treasures I go. (adventurous)
I'm peeling through this earthly womb.  (Investigative, freedome)
I'm shedding away this earthly skin. (renewed energy)
As the dust, carried in the wind. (Grieving loudly)
As the dust, carried in the wind. (Stifling grief more quietly)
As the dust, carried in the wind. (Almost speaking)
As the dust, carried in the wind. (fading (almost a whisper)
Beneath all swears, prayers, and stares, (small, wonder)
In the morning light. In the morning light. (hope)
Drenching the sin, letting sunshine in. (enlightenment)
A wandering soul pleas for more. (pleading)
A wandering soul pleas for more. (pleading more urgently)

Thanks ,I appreciate the insight. I agree, I need to create more of an emotional connection with this song. Haha my voice probably lacks spirit in many areas of this recording because I recorded at around 3am in the morning(sometimes the inspiration arrives at an inconvenience:P). I definitely need to add more oomph with the lines" As the dust carried in the wind". I have a basic zoom h4n recorder; my recording goes as follows:
 
For this recording I was too tired to sing and play at the same time so I multi-layered.  
 
Guitar First: 
 
-Get some cardboard and create a box for the mic to sit in, leave a small hole for the tripod and a side open. 
-Recorder placed just below the body of the guitar, about 2ft,(to pick up the lower bass ends) and positioned off to left of the guitar, so that the recorder's mics are facing diagonally towards the fretboard( from the arm strumming the guitar,  take the position of the elbow and move back some, that is usually where I'll stand the mic. This prevents the recorder from becoming too muddy and it will be able to pick up more room ambiance too- clarity
-In Adobe Audition I apply an equalizer- to raise the lower ends a titch and adjust overtones- I also add a very subtle amount of reverb(less harsh that way)  
 
Voice: 
 
-Since I recorded most of the guitar from the left side, I record the voice from the right side to compensate a little. 
-Place a thin cloth or a windshield over your mic. 
-Set preamp to about 68 
-Position recorder in front of you mouth about 1ft away. 
- In adobe Audition I apply a very subtle amount of reverb and I crank up the highs and raise the lows slightly, because the zoomh4n has a very even range I like to raise the areas where my voice lies so that any background noise will be unnoticed. When you raise the high ends you can get this very vintage/warm sound and softness added.
 
Rendering:
 
-I render to wave or monkey audio; I find that mp3 audio can lose a lot of detail from being overly compressed.  

Thanks everyone, I'm pretty happy with how this one turned out. I'm going to re-record it tomorrow and show you the finished piece .  KillerKu thanks, I tried my best to not make it appear tacky and cheesy. I've been listening to You Am I recently, they were masters at this style of writing,

Here it is, check it out. I tried to turn things around a little bit with this one. 

Here it is, check it out. I tried to turn things around a little bit with this one. 

Sorry for the poor recording quality, it's not finished yet . 

So I wrote a new song today, some of you might have listened to my song "Don't be Strong," this new one is a little different. Please share your thoughts kind people

So I wrote a new song today, some of you might have listened to my song "Don't be Strong," this new one is a little different. Please share your thoughts kind people

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