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Hi, I posted this a few days ago, but for technical reasons the post was lost. Robert Lunte already kindly reviewed it, but if anyone else feels like giving me (constructive) feedback on singing, songwriting or recording, that would be great. 
It's a prog rock piece just over 8 minutes long, hopefully you'll stick through to the end (which was the hardest part to sing due to the challenging harmonies).
George
 
 
 

Yes, it was very cool. Reminded me of Fish from early Marillion.

Hi, I posted this a few days ago, but for technical reasons the post was lost. Robert Lunte already kindly reviewed it, but if anyone else feels like giving me (constructive) feedback on singing, songwriting or recording, that would be great. 
It's a prog rock piece just over 8 minutes long, hopefully you'll stick through to the end (which was the hardest part to sing due to the challenging harmonies).
George
 
 
 

Hi, I posted this a few days ago, but for technical reasons the post was lost. Robert Lunte already kindly reviewed it, but if anyone else feels like giving me (constructive) feedback on singing, songwriting or recording, that would be great. 
It's a prog rock piece just over 8 minutes long, hopefully you'll stick through to the end (which was the hardest part to sing due to the challenging harmonies).
George
 
 
 

My attempt
 
George

Thanks for joining George, Great Job.
It has been real interesting to hear all the different styles and strategies for singing this song.
I am glad that Elvis suggested this.

I like how you used slight hints of vibrato throughout.

My attempt
 
George

Yeah, and I often think of George as a vocal ringer for Gregg Lake from EL&P.

Really cool track. It reminds me of some of my favorite Genesis/King Crimson tracks, but with it's own unique sound. The vocal is very good and serves the song well. The whole thing is well-mixed and mastered to my ears; instruments/vocals are all audible and nothing sticks out of the mix too much. 

Awesome. I can't think of anything that needs fixing and you have great articulation. I can understand every word.

Very nice song / production / performance.  Great mix.  Nice vocals.  I like the different textures you have going on.  Pink Floydish at times.

As usual constructive criticism is welcome .
 

 
I'm didn't belt so much on this as a often do on rock songs, and I think its better for it. I did all vocals and guitars on it.
 
George
 
 
 
 

Wow, no one responded at all? The singing is great, imo. One thing I noticed is the has a lot of cut in higher mid up to presence range frequencies which makes all of the instruments pretty clear, but is a bit cutting and feels maybe a bit crowded and 'pointy' on my ears. Like presence heavy.
 
The song composition is good in the style that it is written, but I tend to prefer more melodicly driven songs like the last one you showed, than more chanting kinds of choruses.
 
If you listen to a lot of modern pop music, there is a lot of room for chanting style choruses. So it's just a taste thing, and I'm glad you're creating music. You should keep going. I don't know why no one responded. It's good singing, it's a singing critique forum.

I liked it a lot. And you started out sounding a little like Tom Jones, for some reason, to me. Did you stop for breakfast in Wales on the way to greatness?

I'm not much if a Rock kind of guy, bur this is very well done. Sounds professional.

great!!!! I love it!!!

You sound american on this. The only thing that makes it different from what I would hear from Lynrd Skynrd, Molly Hatchet, and Georgia Satellites is that you have a clean and precise voice and clear annunciation that lacks the nasality of the southern US accent. You get really close on some of the vocal bends to the southern pattern.
 
Also, even with nasality, americans tend to swallow their vowels and you don't.
 
But you hit the nail on the head. Can't go wrong on a song with beer. You definitely have the story going on. Kind of like Lynrd Skynrd's "Three Steps."
 
"I was cutting a rug
Down at a place called the Jug
with a girl named Linda Lou
 
When in walked a man
With a gun in his hand
And he was looking for you know who.
 
He said Hey there fella
with the hair colored yella
What'ya tryin to do?
 
'Cause that's my woman there
And I'm a man who cares
And this might be all for you.
 
I said, excuse me .."
 
Good job, George, I liked it.

It pretty much just rocks. It completely succeeds at southern rocking. I especially liked the bridge at 2:31, things got a little blue and super passionate sounding, it added a great contrast to the rest of the song. Your slide solo rocks to the end.
 
I think you're kind of just above technical criticism if this is what you can do. You've gotta keep rocking. I'm pretty sure where you're at right now with voice, you have to ask yourself more what singing means to you and how it fits into your life? Whatever else you want to achieve with your voice is likely optional. This works and it works well. Congratulations on getting there, man.

An original southern rock number called "Hey Bartender".    I did all vocals, plus slide guitar from 2'44 through to the end. All the other stuff is by my friends at www.musicianscollaboration.com.     I tried to make myself a little less British and bit more American, but I don't think my usual accent in my singing is all that strongly British anyhow?. By Jove, Tally Ho!   As usual, constructive criticism is welcome.   George

An original southern rock number called "Hey Bartender".    I did all vocals, plus slide guitar from 2'44 through to the end. All the other stuff is by my friends at www.musicianscollaboration.com.     I tried to make myself a little less British and bit more American, but I don't think my usual accent in my singing is all that strongly British anyhow?. By Jove, Tally Ho!   As usual, constructive criticism is welcome.   George

Great! But i now i am confused more with the lyrics , kidding. Hope to hear more from you.

Cyber Agent Saviour
 
As usual, constructive criticism or advice is welcome:
 
This is close to being final, although I have a chance to re-track if necessary.
 
George

Bond, James Bond. And yes, Miss Moneypenny, shaken, not stirred.
 
Good stuff, George.

This is an early version of an original song "The Game".
 
https://app.box.com/s/wkysh01q2qmx5oe35pof
 
Any advice on areas/spots for improvement is welcome  - including where I might put a harmony line?
 
Please excuse the "pops" in the backing, they will no doubt be eliminated before this is finished.