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I liked it, including the flag tribute, the way that Bruce runs around the stage with the Union Jack. Of course, I have always liked your IM covers. You could be in an IM tribute band and you kind of look like him with that ball cap on.

Perfect description. A Roger Waters sound, which worked for this version.

I liked it and I thought I would have a challenge hearing it because I am so used to Klaus' voice. But I like how your voice sounds on this.

In Texas, whatever side of the road I am on is the right side. And I do say "howdy," so you got me there. One of my wife's favorite jokes. What do you cal six pall bearers in Oklahoma? Carry Okie. One of my favorite jokes, which is not a joke, really. Oklahoma has 3.2 beer. So, Okies have to cross into Texas to get 5.5 or better. It was all based on the idea that the native americans on the Choctaw and Chickasaw reservations need the government to control their drinking. Ah, the arrogance of government.

Most any video with a good quality soundtrack is lip-synched. it is the nature of the beast. And at least you have some brasilian heart and that's what counts.

That's okay. I call people from across the Red River, about 14 miles from me, yankees. If I sneeze to north, it is raining in Oklahoma.

What is it about brasilians singing IM as good or better than the original? Great stuff, Felipe. I cannot choose between you and Olem. He has a heavier tone but you both have such solid delivery and the press of the voice, as if you wrote the song and were the singer of that iconic band. I refuse to take sides. Kudos to you. Bravo, maestro Felipe. I don't know portuguese, so pardon my use of mexican spanish, which I do know. Yo tengo mucho gusto para musica de Felipe.

Awesome, as usual, Olem. Are all people in Brasil that happy or is it just you? The maniacal grin works for you. Now, this is a change. You traded in the bandanna for a golfer's cap. Are you starting to hide some gray? Don't be ashamed. Be proud, still singing like the young head-banger you are, despite the mileage of the years. Truly, for you, they are not wasted years.

I like how you sang this in the range that works for you and it gives you a good tone for the song. If were I were a producer or recording guy in the studio, I would say this is the right thing. Vowels are a little clunky, that southern accent still coming through. But you are a country boy and it might seem more odd if you didn't sound a little country on this. But I appreciate even more the unique tone of your voice. And I think you are gaining more control and usefulness from your study of 4 Pillars. This was a solid performance that I think was missing from the first posts of songs you had when you first joined this forum. Rock on my southern brother from another mother.

Actually, according to Douglas Adams, as he wrote "Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy," the answer to the question of life, the universe, and everything is - 42. Perhaps someone asked the wrong question and should have worried about 6 times 7. And don't worry, Jon, others are rejecting my ideas in physics. So, it is evidently not a viable model or explanation, according to others who may be experts. I cannot be an expert because I am not a voice coach or teacher of singing.

I can also help with something I learned from actor Jack Nicholson. Repeat after me: "goosenfrabe." Then sing a round of "I Feel Pretty" from "West Side Story." There are times when you remind me of myself. A bit snippy. It can help to breathe, sit back, relax, do something fun and then get back to work. And, oh yeah, Felipe has good points you should heed.

I come up with crazy lyrics. Even for a sound check on a mic. "Test, one, two, two, one, two. My mother was test tube, my father was a knife, I am a clone baby, I have no real life." Thankyouverymuch.

Good job, Jeremy. Only thing I could suggest, as I really did not hear pitchiness but a few pitch scoops (where you ramp up to the note) and a few wobbles (which can cause the scoop) is your accent. Watch the vowels. My or eye should be mah or ah. And you suffer the southern man's curse on "love." Something that used to hobble me, too. For now, make it either lahv or loov. The southern US accent on that word is atrocious. But you got everything else right in there, as much as I could tell.

Way cool. And I like the song and how you mixed it. After you get it out there, see if you can shop it to movie and tv people. Getting on a soundtrack brings some big cheese, these days.

Definitely reminiscent of Zep with the slight haze of a funny cigarette of rolled up Zappa and Mothers of Invention. Way cool, I really like this. And I think you are achieving the Jimmy Page wall of guitars thing in this one.

Ich habe das gern. Yo tengo much gusto. I like it a lot. You should finish it.

Ancient secret for getting more than 20 people to hear a song. Put it in a place where more than 20 people can hear it. I like easy math.

Pretty dang cool. Made me think of the Motor City Madman. And, in my neck of the woods, that is a compliment.

Sometimes, I might analyze it that way for a solo, other times, I will just use pentatonic in either E for or A form, choosing a different note than the tonic of the song as anchor. For example E form pentatonic played at the 5th fret, which would be A, while the chords are still playing E or even a D7. It still makes sense harmonically but sounds different.

I don't know what DAW you are using but Robert has a link to a site where you can buy a backing track for about a dollar. And you can order it how you want it. With background vocals, without, etcetera. Usually downloads as an mp3 but you can choose other file types. Just remember that wav files are the best, data-wise but they can be huge. 10 to 15 MB for a 4 to 5 minute song. You can drag that mp3 into an open track in your DAW. Depending on interface, you should have live monitor. If you don't, you really need to get one. My first interface did not have it. So, what I would do is pan the backing track hard right and pull off my left head phone to monitor my voice acoustically (reflective surfaces are closer on my left where I am recording.) This would allow you a better balance of music and voice. Right now, your voice is overpowering the music. For the singing, you must absolutely realize and accept as a physical law of the universe the fact that singing is different than speaking. Right now, you are speaking this song. In the chorus, when you roll your ah forward and closer to an oh for "eyes," yes, that gives you a bit a punk accent and similar to what Billy is doing. What you need to do is think of that everywhere else. Singing is vowels and articulation. And articulation for singing is different than speaking. So, in the mornings, wake up, put on your slippers, whatever other morning ablutions you must do and repeat this mantra, "the singing voice is a musical instrument." Because it is, just as much as a guitar, piano, drums, flute, whatever. It is a musical instrument and you are a musician if you are singing. And, in so doing, you will approach vowels more cleanly and articulate softer to the degree that allows the vowels a straight shot out. What goes up, must come down. The earth spins on its axis creating sunrise and sunset. The sky is blue, the ground is firm, water is wet, and the singing voice is a musical instrument. So, there it is, one of the physical laws of the universe. I think this song is a good match for you and you have a naturally good tone of voice and in a few places, you sound similar to Billy. I would definitely keep this song in your list of songs that you can and should perform, either for others or for more permanent recording.

Sometimes, when I am stuck on a chord change, I literally go to the circle of fifths to pick the next chord to see if that breaks me out of a rut or provides an interval that fits what the melody had in mind.

This forum is about singing, not specifically original songwriting. In fact, a lot of people may listen but not comment because it is an original song. They have no "original" recording to which to compare and see how your singing fares against some other famous singer because your post is the original. It is what it is. You might check out my thread on critique in this section. The biggest part is how to receive a critique and some attention to how one can give one. I would hate to see this degenerate into ad hominems. It does not matter if Collin is young or has never written a song. He can state an opinion, accurate or not. I find that your song is anything but bland and would therefore disagree with Collin. But that is just my opinion, from my own set of experiences and sense of aesthetics. So, his possible youth and lack of posting original songs doesn't necessarily disqualify him from commenting. A member of my family taught me how to read a music staff. I taught myself how to play guitar. But I also took a music theory class in high school with a bunch of other guitar geeks as an easy course. Does that make me more qualified? Not necessarily. Such are reactions you might get in the real world, playing this for audiences or selling it for downloads. Some are going to like it and buy it. Some will not. And it can be problematic posting originals and receiving critique, such as in this case, where what you wrote and sang meant something to you but it doesn't mean the same to everyone. I once posted a cover of a Led Zeppelin song that everyone liked except for one guy. And it wasn't my performance that was the problem. He stated that he never really liked Led Zeppelin music or that style of rock singing. And my thought was, "well, then, why comment at all?" It was better to let it go and later he came to me asking for advice on american pronunciation for his ESL class (he was polish.) And his singing got better and I like to think I was able to help. Or is it that you post these as a showcase? Not exactly looking for critique. In which case, you might get less response. Many may not respond at all if they have nothing good to say. It is difficult to just showcase in a section that says "review my singing." Just think to yourself how something can be humurous, even ironic. I did a cover of a couple of country songs and was told I was not country enough. Too precise on my pitch and articulation in one case. Giggle, snicker, oh well ...

I think Collin can say what he wishes, because it is just an opinion. I had to go through this myself, and I am older than most everyone here except for MDEW, Bob, and Adolph. I can cover a song like "Leader of the Band" and only two other people in this whole forum even know of that song, at least until we started having threads on it. And none of the young guys commented on it, it was outside of their experience. Which is okay. Granted, Collin's comments seem more geared toward production values and state of finish. And you said it was not finished, to begin with. Kind of like you saying, "this is blue," and someone else says, "this is blue," and you say, "what do you mean it's blue?" In the end, we don't get to control the audience, their age, what they like or don't like. It is what it is.

My intention is not to hurt feelings, or to sugar-coat, either. A few times I mention a sound or influence or reference I hear and it somehow becomes an "insult." Even though I said I liked this song and others. And maybe you don't know, but I am a southern boy and Molly Hatchet were huge, back in the day. In fact, I should take umbrage at the idea of being compared to Molly Hatchet is some kind of insult. What does that say about me if I like Molly Hatchet and someone else would consider it insulting? But I don't take it as an insult. Sorry, just didn't pick up the Coverdale sound. Maybe my ears are messed up and I am not qualified to comment. So, peace out ...

Molly Hatchet meets Ziggy Stardust. I liked it.