Well, i have made another version, focusing on nailing pitch. I hope i am doing somewhat better. I think i started most phrases in the verses on a D when i think Bruce starts on an E, also i think i have a tendency of skipping notes when i "climb". For example when i started on an E, i then tend to skip the F and go right on to the G. So, what i think i must practise more is scales. Well, what do you think of this version?
https://www.box.com/s/wwciszpfv2vc1tofpqrn