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I liked your voice best at the "pre-chorus" sections. The chorus sounds odd to me, sort of cartoonish. And the low parts were nice too. Keep on rocking man! :cool:

Hey guys, Good Job! I liked the contrast between the voices, that MDEW already mentioned. I felt that Ronws sang it so relaxed and easy that he got a bit late in the timing. Not that this is a bad thing, I just noticed it. Quick question: what did you do (Ronws) when you sang "and in the master chambers, they gathered for the feast..."?! Because it sounded really powerful, and maybe compressed and different than what I'm used to listen from you. Really cool tone! Bay, I really liked your take on this classic rock! AWESOME! :cool:

Beautiful and soft voice. I liked it!

A.W.E.S.O.M.E.!!!!

Hey Neko, I liked it too! But let me tell you one thing: I think I told you before in your cover of Still Loving You how I liked the way you alternate from "sweet-light" singing to a raspy-distorted rock sound. You did that in the beginning of the song, and it was cool, but I missed more of these moments in the rest of the song. If I may suggest you to try this song alternating the soft and hard singing. I think it would be more artistically appealing, IMO. Great singing man, keep them coming. :cool:

Yeah! I never heard this song before, so I can't compare with the original. Nevertheless, I thought you were great, sounded very nice and controlled. Cheers

Hey man, good job! I don't know anything from The Eagles, a part from Hotel California , so I can comment on that. But I thought that it is really nice, the story, and the music reminded me of some tunes from the 80s, probably because of the keyboards. A few years back I wrote a song that I think has got the country music feeling, although I'm not qualified as a country music expert, and after listening to your song I thought about posting it just an acoustic guitar version, so you guys let me know what you think. Cheers!

Awesome! I found it really funny, even though I didn't understand anything...ha ha :P

Good job man! I got mixed feelings after listening to your cover. I really liked the way you alternate the light and heavy parts with the distortion. But I thought the chorus was a bit theatrical for me, or at least the 2nd part of the chorus. I think you got a nice tone for hard rock songs. Keep on rocking and posting more songs.:cool:

Hi Neko, many thanks for taking the time to listening and the kind words. This was the first time I could sing the whole song in my practice, so I just had to record it. Now thanks to all these people's comments and tips I'll be able to do it better with practice. Cheers

Hi Owen, WOW! How can I ever thank you and all these people enough for helping me? This "forum" really makes you feel welcome and worthy. I really liked all the tips man, and in fact, I have started practicing the songs line by line, as you and other people have suggested, and it really helps. This recording was the very first time I got to sing all the notes, or at least, close enough, of this song. So, my main concern was to get the high notes and keep chord closure all the way. It is evident that I am able to sing most of the high notes, I just need to work it. I can't wait to go back to my routine of practice, as I am recovering of a 2-no-singing-week due to work demands and a cold I caught. Today I was just fooling around singing some songs, and it felt much better. I will definitely try all your tips man, with exception of the coach, which I intend to do, but in due time. Many thanks again.

Hi Keith, you could be right about fishing for the notes. As this was the first time in my practice that I could sing those notes (or at least close enough), I was definitely not confident at all. I'm sure with practice it will get better. I am just recovering from a 2-week-no-singing because of work and a cold I caught. So, when I tried to sing yesterday it was awful. Today I'm having a better vocal-day. Many thanks for taking the time to listen and commenting. It really means a lot to me, as it helps me to improve. Hopefully, in a few weeks I can post a cover that is not from practice, but a performance cover. Cheers :cool:

Hey Ronws, I think I definitely have RLS...he he he :)

Hey Garnet, I never heard this song nor the band before, but I thought you did an excellent job! I liked your timbre as well, not too dark, not too bright, right in the middle. You are really talented, as you learned how to sing this well by yourself. I listened to some of your other songs in SoundCloud and I liked it. Welcome to the forum, and I hope you stick around, specially in the critique section, as I started to post my vocal practices to get tips on improvement. Cheers

Sounding good man! I can't wait to hear it with a backing track! :D

Hey Aspiring, thanks again for stoping by, and helping me with a further analysis of the song. I couldn't agree more with you and MDEW regarding the chorus. I just listened to the recording and I got what you guys are saying. After "Till now" the tone changes completely, and for worse. I liked what you suggested for practice, singing the whole sentence instead of the notes of each word. It makes more sense. I think it was 2 days ago I tried something the Xamedhi suggested me, practicing the song sentence by sentence, after the original singer, and the results are so much better. Many thanks again, cheers.

Hey man, many thanks for listening and commenting. I agree with you regarding the tone in the verses being better than in the chorus. But, does it sound like myself, or a copy of Axel Rose? Cause I really didn't have him on my mind while singing this...hahaha. The chorus needs a lot of work. Today I was giving it a listen, and I got what MDEW said about being off-pitch but so close to the right pitch that it sounds weird. Well, as I said in another post, this was the first time in my practice that I got to sing this song completely, so I just had to post it here to find out if I am on the right track. I also agree with you and Garnet about the chorus being shouty and still light. But as I said, as I keep practicing the sounds get bigger/beefier. At least, it is happening with the chorus of Miles Away, it sounds fuller now than on the recording, and it came easier too. I'm still having a hard time with the vowels, so the way I started practicing this week was singing an ooh (as an owl) and trying to keep that throat shape while singing the lyrics, and it is being helpful so far. Many thanks again Seb

Hey Garnet, first of all thank you so much for taking the time to listen and comment. I totally agree with you regarding the difficulty level of this song, and I am totally aware that are several things to fix in this recording. This is why I posted here. However, just to clarify, I found my way through my passaggio break just a couple of months ago, and it was by myself, with no coach to guide me. Since then, I started practicing singing several songs really challenging that are helping me to strength the coordination and build muscle memory (such as: Alone-Heart, Don't stop believing - Journey, Still loving you - Scorpions, Ben - M. Jackson, Miles away - Winger, In a darkened room - Skid Row, Coming Home - Cinderella, Fool for your loving - Whitesnake, Love aint no stranger - Whitesnake, Give me all your love tonight - Whitesnake, Superman - Five for Fighting, Sweet Child o'Mine - Guns, Nightrain - Guns, Like a stone - Audioslave). I already posted here my practice of Superman, Like a Stone, and Miles Away, so if you feel inclined to have a listen at those too, I would very much appreciate it. Well, back to this thread, so this recording of Alone was actually the first time I could sing the whole song in maybe 2 weeks of unfocused practice. As a former "chest-puller", my only concern while singing this song was not to fall back into yelling mode, which I succeeded. Now, with the tips I'm getting here, from you and several others, I'll just keep practicing in my spare time, incorporating all the techniques needed, while strengthening the coordination and my voice. I will definitely re-post the improved version of this song and the others I have posted before. Many thanks again, and don't forget to check my other vocal practices, if you don't mind. Cheers

Hey buddy, you know I'm no vocal teacher and not even an advanced student, but it would be my pleasure to share with you a few things that helped me to overcome my passaggio, although I still need a lot of work to smooth it out. If you want we could have a little chat over Skype. Just send me an e-mail and let me know what you think. Cheers!

How about the puppy sound?! hehe

Hey MDEW, I checked your cover of Never been to Spain, and commented. I think I know what you mean regarding the vocalizes. I used to be able to sing really high notes during vocalizes at home, but whenever I got band practice, I would just go into yelling mode and would not sing any of those high notes. I think this has to do with those vowels that Ronws keeps talking about. You could try practice the sounds/vocalizes with several different vowels, so you would get a sense of where they go. It may take time until you get your break thru, but once you get it, you just need to work on the right coordination to build muscle memory.

Hey MDEW, I listened only to the 2nd version, so I can compare, but I liked your tone throughout the whole song. Of course, you can still smooth it out a few spots to sound your best, but it is good overall. Have you tried practicing with the cry sound, as Olem suggested? I think you could really benefit from it. I know it helped me a lot. Cheers!

Yeah, so we got our break in the same area. I think you did well, considering that the song is right in your break. So, you really have to work to overcome this obstacle and smooth it out. I guarantee you will feel so much powerful and amazing when you got the key to unleash your voice my friend. Until just a few months ago I couldn't sing Hotel California verses without yelling (F#4) and not even get to the chorus (A4). But now, this song comes so much easier, that it is unbelievable. Don't give up and keep working on this bridge man! But the other part of my question was, can you sing through your passagio doing vocalizes? Cheers

Hey MDEW, I agree with you 100%! If you are doing covers do it with your own voice, your way. I usually do that when I want to see what other people have done with a song. Let me ask you something, if you don't mind. In which notes are you breaking/choking, flipping? Do you have the same problem when doing vocalizes or scales, or is it just when you put in words? Cheers and keep on rocking!

Hey MDEW, it doesn't sound like Elvis at all... It actually sounds like you wrote the song! I really liked it man! You got a nice timbre going on. But let me tell you, I think you still need to work on the high notes so you can transition better, because IMO it sounds a bit awkward, almost forced. I don't know if those notes are on the top of your current range, or in your passaggio, but you need to get them stronger (I don't mean louder). Other than that, I think you sounded great! Congrats and keep on rocking man! :cool: